is my favorite word. My favorite way to describe the wind, your limbs, speech, sun, hair, water – All connected by a single idea of movement, a single sound, a single belief in magic.
Not at all - I think the better question is do you think it ends too suddenly? Did it feel like more was there? I adore short poems, particularly when they feel complete, as this does. It was, of course, beautiful by the way
I still have yet to decide if it feels complete or not. I know I cannot end anything more, but it still doesn't feel rounded if that makes any sense to any one other than myself.
I know the feeling. There are a number of things that I have written - recently and in the past - in which I am quite undecided. I am particularly bad at picking something back up, though, and carrying it on as though I never stopped. Rounded? Yes, I can see that... a sense of balance and finality, a bit more than what there is. Sometimes, I all in love with words or ideas or a way-of-saying something but I can never quite integrate it properly into something else and for the sake of roundness... I must cut it, leave it, edit it. It can be a difficult thing to pursue when one considers the enormity of thought behind a relatively small wall of words.
Ah. Yeah I suppose the more minimalistic approach you took worked out for the better. It also had brightened my day just a bit more. Keep up the good work and you'll have made a fan out of me.
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