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Haven’t you ever seen a girl with glass in her skin?
The broken kind:  shattered jars and smashed windows,
jagged edges, dip dyed tips                  red –
looks good on the both of us                  walls, too.
Pretend walls with Wonder Woman posters hanging,
the Wonder Woman with big boobs, never the other.
Walls you smash holes in with your cut up fist – my bad.

It’s the skin.  I warned you, half –heartedly,
warnings lost in a sea of words,
I talk too much when I forget my lines.
We now have a matching pair,
        scars, that is.
My palms read havoc,
in the morning yours will too.
Stay long enough and I might spell words       words of wisdom:
never touch girls with glass in their skin.
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Guys, I haven't died!

My friend gave me the prompt "Havoc" to write about. Here is the results.

You may not use this, under any circumstances, without my permission. Havoc (c) dawn181, a.k.a Taylor (me)
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~Adonael Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
'We now have a matching pair,
scars, that is.'

In regard to the first stanza about boobs, this line made me smile a little bit xD

It was a hit hard for me to grasp, but I gathered the general cautionary 'no person is perfect so tread carefully' kind of vibe. I like the way it was written too - chaotic and almost presented so that you read it speedily.
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=dawn181 Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I had to add the boobs part, I needed at least some humor (and my eyes had wandered to the Wonder Women poster on my wall, and I felt like the girl needed to be included in some way :) )

I was in a very chaotic mood when writing, so I'm glad that it showed through. And that's an interesting point you bring up, about the poem being read speedily, because I was just reflecting earlier how my poems seem to all read speedily.

Thank you for reading and responding with such kind insight :) :hug:
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:iconadonael:
~Adonael Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I get that. It's cool that you got all spontaneous with your eyes wandering :)

So I know I'm doing something right when I read your poems. Happy I could share the experience through reading it :P

No worries :tighthug:
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=Bickhamsarah Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is great too. Man, I know it's taken me forever to read your stuff but when I do I'm never disappointed. :D
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=dawn181 Mar 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh thank you so much :D That means a lot.

Sorry it's taken me forever to reply ^^;
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=Bickhamsarah Mar 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
lol don't worry about it. I'm rarely on these days. And if I'm on I purposefully neglect my comment stack. XD

You're most welcome!! :dance:
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~DarkLondonDreams Feb 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is really good! I tend to think in images and colours, so it created a very strong definition of the word. The structure was different, but I liked that also. :)
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=dawn181 Mar 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
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:iconstarell:
Really cool structure! Nice interpretation of the word!
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=dawn181 Mar 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!!
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